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  • and during the last of those

    The problem is really with this fragment. What is “those”? There’s a lot of nouns in that sentence fragment, and it’s not immediately obvious what “those” is modifying, without having to piece together which noun has the plurality to justify a plural determinative. It’s an awkward sentence without changing it to “those years”.

    Also, if you’re going to write above a middle-school level, learn about commas. It’s “last of those, there”. The lack of comma just forces you to re-read this run-on sentence fragment.