Was the baby dead? In trying to edit out the word ‘rescue’ you’ve left a key detail ambiguous.
You refered to a human as “it”, because you didn’t want to say “baby” twice but the details didn’t include a gender and that sentence structure didn’t provide a good way to just refer to the baby once. This is commonly considered pretty dehumanizing choice of pronoun. I’d argue this is much more likely to offend people.
All this to avoid some imagined implied slight by the choice of the phrase “left alone” when there’s no whiff that the subject of the verb would be the mother.
There was some eagerness to find offence at a really innocuous headline, but really it’s quite a fairly straightforward headline that requires the reader to pretty much try to be offended by a particular reading of what most would consider an innocuous phrase.
Though it does omit the detail about the baby being alone since the death. As written that could refer to just a very unfortunate family where the mother died, and then while the tragedy of the mother’s death was fresh the family dealt with a separate tragedy that came close to killing the child.
Including the “alone” is pretty pertinent for the general picture.
And this entire incident is after someone managed to take offense at the concept of a baby “left alone” by a death as somehow accusatory toward the mother, which is far from a concept that I would have read into that headline.
Remember, the gripe being expressed here is that “left alone” is the action being described. You’re claiming that it’s hard to include all the same details without including that phrase, so let’s really re-write it with the exact same details so you can see how simple it is to just change the action:
A baby was found alone after days in a Phoenix, Arizona, apartment and was rescued by police officers last month after the infants mother had died, officials said Friday.
“A baby was found alone days after its mother died.”
It’s truly not that difficult at all.
Was the baby dead? In trying to edit out the word ‘rescue’ you’ve left a key detail ambiguous.
You refered to a human as “it”, because you didn’t want to say “baby” twice but the details didn’t include a gender and that sentence structure didn’t provide a good way to just refer to the baby once. This is commonly considered pretty dehumanizing choice of pronoun. I’d argue this is much more likely to offend people.
All this to avoid some imagined implied slight by the choice of the phrase “left alone” when there’s no whiff that the subject of the verb would be the mother.
There was some eagerness to find offence at a really innocuous headline, but really it’s quite a fairly straightforward headline that requires the reader to pretty much try to be offended by a particular reading of what most would consider an innocuous phrase.
Oh even better: “Baby rescued days after mother died”
So easy.
Though it does omit the detail about the baby being alone since the death. As written that could refer to just a very unfortunate family where the mother died, and then while the tragedy of the mother’s death was fresh the family dealt with a separate tragedy that came close to killing the child.
Including the “alone” is pretty pertinent for the general picture.
And this entire incident is after someone managed to take offense at the concept of a baby “left alone” by a death as somehow accusatory toward the mother, which is far from a concept that I would have read into that headline.
Remember, the gripe being expressed here is that “left alone” is the action being described. You’re claiming that it’s hard to include all the same details without including that phrase, so let’s really re-write it with the exact same details so you can see how simple it is to just change the action:
And all that can be covered in additional phrasing, but still leads with the death of the mother instead of a baby being left alone.
Get it yet?